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Air Hunger

 

Her deeds are a knife, 
Slicing across me,
From the middle of my palm,
To the base of my wrist,
Splitting open threads of my skin.
Yet there is no crimson seepin’ from the slit.


i can't hold everything she does,
but i want to.
if she decided to become the sun,
i would wrap her in my arms
and let myself melt into 
oblivion. 

I feel as though I am not enough,
Yet simultaneously too much.
I hunger for the air,
Burdened by this breathlessness
As I stare the overhead down,
With yellowed eyes. 
But I yearn not to the be sun,
Rather the skies.
The air that fades away as I get high.


this blood inside of me
is only half my own,
the rest replaced with my semi love
for the dirt under my fingernails and
a soul with humanity 
weighing them down like
a locket filled with a wolf pack.

This emptiness sits flat on my chest,
Like a wildebeest took a seat where my heart used to be.
Leaving a crater full with my punctured lungs,
Broken bones,
And torn muscles.
Her blank stares and swallowed words,
Never felt so heavy or spoke so clearly.


we were a mess in a forest, 
and she answered the age old question of
if a tree falls and no-one is around to 
hear it, does it make a noise?
i watched her cut one down
just too see, because she said
that she was nobody. then
i watched her cry,
because she realized with a shock
that all pain roars. 

This is a collaboration with the amazing *solis-ortus. One of my favorite writers and people. I'm telling you, she's a poetry savant. This is one of the most fun collaborations I've ever worked on with anyone and we worked SO FAST. Gah, this was a blast. :love:

I hope you'all enjoy this. :)

We alternated stanzas and mine are in the bold while *solis-ortus' are normal. :meow:

=SpriteBlayde Shout-out to Sensei for her little suggestion back when the first stanza was originally the only thing I had down for this. :lmao:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is awesome. And that last line really clinches it all together.

Again, the cohesion! :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really proud of this collaboration 'cause this was one of those things where it just "clicked" like that! solis-ortus and I seem to have a pretty natural ability to meld our words together to create something pretty fantastic. :)
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the-looking-glass Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014

great poem! i love how your voices work together.


i really feel the last stanza about crying over a dead tree, that was me freshman year and my roommate didn't get it at all :')

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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: On behalf of solis-ortus and myself, thank you ever so much. :iconbowplz:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014

I really, really loved this collaborative poem. It is so beautiful and the emotion is portrayed was so real that I felt it.

Beautiful work you two created together.

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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: On behalf of *solis-ortus and myself, thank you so much. :heart:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
You're both very much welcome!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
this was so much fun. it was rad to work with you, Ricky! :D 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I couldn't have said that any better myself, Phyllis. This was awesome, for sure. :)
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is wonderfully fantastic
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :) I greatly appreciate you taking time out of your day to comment. You're great! :D
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No you're great!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
pure perfection.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: On behalf of *solis-ortus and myself, thank you ever so much, Tay'. <3
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