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Bite Your Tongue Till It Bleeds

 

Speak now or forever hold your peace,
Or is it piece?
‘Cause if I hold this piece of my mind,
To myself, there will be no peace,
Only an explosion of the mental mine
That riddles mine.
I’m no man, I’m a mime,
Holding his hands over his mouth,
Biting my tongue so these words have no way out,
With my eyes half-lidded, the other half brimmin’,
With tears near the bottom half of the rim,
Ready to fall like rainwater races down a windowsill.
 
Angry to the point where I wish I could control the skies,
Rain down Hell and fury that has built up inside,
And watch my furious vision destroy the night.
 
But this is not me,
This not how I am,
Nor how I will ever be.
It’s just that I’ve been holding my peace
For such a long damn time.
Now it just seems the only “peace” I’m holding,
Are pieces of my mind.
Looks like I was able to find another way to use "piece/peace!" So I hope you all like this piece. :) Kind of venting poetry, kind of a narrative-ish thing 'cause I think everyone can relate to this a little bit. :aww:

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uchiha12132000 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Student Writer
I really like your poem. It really makes me think about how I live my life and just really makes me think. I have read it like five times over and it still is very interesting:)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh, thank you so much. :heart:
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LadyOfFrost Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The play on piece/peace is really clever. And swerving away from my lit-critic voice, yes, I can completely relate to this. We hide way too much and keep way too much locked up, and this is a plain awesome way of saying so. I have fairly major trust issues, so I do this biting my tongue way more than I should, and eventually, it will bleed - and that's when I scare the living daylights out of everyone around me with my sudden temper. Awesome work, as always! Clap 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: Thank you so much-- I'm glad this touched you, Joz. <3
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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome and thought-provoking....Love it!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, Steph! :)
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Like1guy Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
jhfklwhkfjhkjhjfksjlfhlhflhkshljfhklf this is so awesome you have no idea
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:lmao: Thank you so much! I really appreciate that! :D
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Deadfish-SilentArmy Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Really very good!  Clap 
well written... and clever!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Deadfish-SilentArmy Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No probs... I mean't it!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this poem because of the way it portrays pacifism and poisoning self-doubt. I also like how the poem's symbolism is concrete (my personal favorite is the stanza portion describing the mime, and the last stanza) without being too melodramatic.

All in all, a good poem. Well written :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: I love this comment 'cause of course, you got it right on the mark. Thank you, brother. :manhug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: You're awesome. Remember that.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, brother. :manhug:
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teddibuns Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Student General Artist
again, another powerful piece. I can most definitely relate to this. Shouko-hair (Baka to test) 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Student General Artist
I really like the concept you have going here, it's interesting and it made me stop and think. Great poem, by the way. You can definitely feel the emotion of the narrator/author, it makes you want to reach through your computer screen and help them. :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes, wonderful, thank you ever so much lovely Grace. I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts on this piece, my friend. :hug:
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Student General Artist
You are more than welcome :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
(Expect a note from me tomorrow most likely, Grace. I'd love to chat with you more. :D)
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Sounds like a plan! :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent job! 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you! I greatly appreciate you stopping by on this piece to leave a comment; it's very kind of you. :)
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D (Big Grin) 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Meow :3 ;) (Wink) 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Giggle 
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I still like this wordplay. 

And I like the feeling of slowly going mad that comes through. :D 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that. :)
And thank you so much! :D
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :D 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug: 
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WeirdAndLovely Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very interesting.  It really has an intense "I'm slowly going crazy" feel to it.  I don't think I care for it though, because I read your poems as if you're speaking, and I don't like the thought of you going crazy.... slowly or otherwise.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I get you. :nod: You did catch the feel I was going for though. :aww:
But I understand, but like I told ya', this was more of a narrative with personal bits thrown in, y'know?
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WeirdAndLovely Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah... but still....  You not goin crazy.  Unless it's crazy in LLLLLLLLLLUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUVVVVVVVVVVVVVV with me.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:laughing:
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Viidith22 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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Viidith22 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Prescribed-Madness Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know why but I love this one so much
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy to hear that; thank you. :)
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Sydnut Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I really love this! great job!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, Sydney! :)
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TheLastWhiteRose85 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I happened upon this as I looked at one of my poems. This was very well written, you are quite the poet :) I definitely want to read more of your stuff ;)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so, so much. I really appreciate that. :)
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