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Bite Your Tongue Till It Bleeds

 

Speak now or forever hold your peace,
Or is it piece?
‘Cause if I hold this piece of my mind,
To myself, there will be no peace,
Only an explosion of the mental mine
That riddles mine.
I’m no man, I’m a mime,
Holding his hands over his mouth,
Biting my tongue so these words have no way out,
With my eyes half-lidded, the other half brimmin’,
With tears near the bottom half of the rim,
Ready to fall like rainwater races down a windowsill.
 
Angry to the point where I wish I could control the skies,
Rain down Hell and fury that has built up inside,
And watch my furious vision destroy the night.
 
But this is not me,
This not how I am,
Nor how I will ever be.
It’s just that I’ve been holding my peace
For such a long damn time.
Now it just seems the only “peace” I’m holding,
Are pieces of my mind.
Looks like I was able to find another way to use "piece/peace!" So I hope you all like this piece. :) Kind of venting poetry, kind of a narrative-ish thing 'cause I think everyone can relate to this a little bit. :aww:

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uchiha12132000 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Student Writer
I really like your poem. It really makes me think about how I live my life and just really makes me think. I have read it like five times over and it still is very interesting:)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh, thank you so much. :heart:
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LadyOfFrost Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The play on piece/peace is really clever. And swerving away from my lit-critic voice, yes, I can completely relate to this. We hide way too much and keep way too much locked up, and this is a plain awesome way of saying so. I have fairly major trust issues, so I do this biting my tongue way more than I should, and eventually, it will bleed - and that's when I scare the living daylights out of everyone around me with my sudden temper. Awesome work, as always! Clap 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbowplz: Thank you so much-- I'm glad this touched you, Joz. <3
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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome and thought-provoking....Love it!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, Steph! :)
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Like1guy Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
jhfklwhkfjhkjhjfksjlfhlhflhkshljfhklf this is so awesome you have no idea
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:lmao: Thank you so much! I really appreciate that! :D
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Deadfish-SilentArmy Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Really very good!  Clap 
well written... and clever!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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